wow. a devastating look at how deep-seated insecurities can manifest in such polar opposite, yet equally destructive, ways....that final exchange on the screen is a heartbreaking touch. Thanks for sharing, Haley. Very much looking forward to reading more of your work.
The noting of calories and weight count at the end. Specificity always draws us, the reader, in and renders something as fact, grounds us in the moment.
The paragraph detailing the pro-Ana community. Perfectly poised and cutting. “a religion which involved the worshipping of a made-up goddess named “Ana” who was seen as beautiful and would make all of the girls thin.” Loved this line specifically!
The ending was great! And I loved the added touch of the text image! Pitch perfect.
This was such a jarring but interesting dynamic and I enjoyed the read! Dark and sad and allowing a glimpse into polar opposite situations—as always a treat to read your work
Wow, this one really packed a punch Haley. Clean and clever. I enjoyed it loads!
Thank you so much!!
wow. a devastating look at how deep-seated insecurities can manifest in such polar opposite, yet equally destructive, ways....that final exchange on the screen is a heartbreaking touch. Thanks for sharing, Haley. Very much looking forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read this and comment! It’s so appreciated! Thank you for the lovely words 😊
Stellar work here, Haley!
Some bits I loved:
The noting of calories and weight count at the end. Specificity always draws us, the reader, in and renders something as fact, grounds us in the moment.
The paragraph detailing the pro-Ana community. Perfectly poised and cutting. “a religion which involved the worshipping of a made-up goddess named “Ana” who was seen as beautiful and would make all of the girls thin.” Loved this line specifically!
The ending was great! And I loved the added touch of the text image! Pitch perfect.
Great work, Haley. You put in the work!
Thanks so much, Levi! I wouldn’t have been able to finish it without ya and your help!
Your feedback inspired me with some of the ideas I ended up throwing in there, like the ones you mentioned. So again, thank YOU so much! 🖤
I couldn’t even remember what I suggested! You wove it all in seamlessly.
Glad this story exists out there in the world, and you are getting some love and praise for your fantastic story.
This was such a jarring but interesting dynamic and I enjoyed the read! Dark and sad and allowing a glimpse into polar opposite situations—as always a treat to read your work
Thank you SO much! I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment 🖤 I’m glad you enjoyed!
Thank you so much!!